Wednesday, November 7, 2012

Wednesday Briefers: Orphic Revelations

This week we had several photo prompts, along with line/word prompts: "The night was deadly quiet..." or the alternate prompts. Use: shadow, vengeance, blister or "She/he brushed up against me, and I saw (blank) in her/his eyes..." or use: tea, samurai, patience or "When was the last time you....?" I chose the prompt with shadow, vengeance, blister.

This is a new story! Woo hoo!! I do so hope you enjoy it, as well as the follow up chapters that will come throughout November. *Warning* There is some graphic violence.





My father's enemies had wreaked their vengeance. They killed my father, captured me, and claimed my family as slaves. My mother would not allow such disgrace. Using her woman's knife, she opened the veins of both of my little sisters and then her own. They were found in the courtyard under the sacred family tree, clothed in their best robes with their hands touching, the blood from their slit wrists turning the soil red.

Furious at their lost worth, my uncle beat me until I was barely conscious. I screamed when his slippered foot drew back and slammed between my legs. I woke in a dark cell some time later. 

To shame me, my hair was shaved and I was dressed in slave rags. A thick metal collar, scrolled with symbols on the top and bottom, was fastened around my neck. It chafed for a long time until the skin around my neck thickened and scarred.

Days blended together while the seasons passed. I shivered in the winter in my cell, a blanket a luxury I never earned. Summers I sweated, thirst mounting until I could barely stop myself from begging for a single sip of water.

I'd been barely old enough to leave my mother's  side when my uncle finally claimed the entirety of the family businesses. I finished my growing years as his slave, starved and beaten. I was small, never growing as tall as I should have, but I was far from weak. I was worked hard from sunrise to beyond sunset each day. The only touch I ever felt was to cause pain.

I was scrubbing the outside walking stones, my fingers wrinkled and sore from the harsh soap in the water, when a window opened on the second floor. Voices floated on the wind down to my ears.

"It's dangerous."

My uncle scoffed. "He's broken. Even if he were not, he is uneducated and marked as a slave. No one will follow him."

"I wish him gone. If you will not kill him, sell him. I have a contact that says the wemic is looking for a servant to take back with him into the mountains."

The brush snapped in my hands. The brush clattered against the stones. I flinched, futilely trying to fit it back to the handle.

"Slave!"

My shoulders hunched.

"Come here."

I slowly put the broken pieces of the brush next to the bucket, rising to my feet. Walking soundlessly, my hands loose at my sides, I went up the stairs to my uncle's office on the second floor.

The door slid open before I finished climbing the stairs. Two steps inside I sank to my knees, dropping my forehead to the floor. It was better to be looking down, so that I would never be tempted to meet his cold blue eyes. I'd learned that early on.

"What was that noise?"

"I broke a brush sir." My voice was barely audible, hoarse from disuse.

"You dare break my property?" His voice was deadly calm. A whistle through the air made me tense, though I tried not to.

I bit my lip bloody, holding in my screams as a thick rod struck my back. The iron tang filled my mouth until it was finally over. A fine tremble shook me.

Still in that deadly calm voice, he spoke again, "Why did you break the brush?"

"I am a clumsy fool." That response, too, had been drilled into me.

"Oh, I think it was more than that. Were you listening to our conversation?"

Denial was my only hope. "Of course not."

The rod struck again and again. "You lie."

"No, no, I swear." Tears streamed down my face but I didn't cry out from my beating.

The other voice was full of scorn. "I am sure he did hear, Father. I'll not have him here to threaten my takeover of the family. Sell him."

My fear was stronger than the agonizing fire in my back. "No, please, the wemic will kill me."

I fell onto my side when a slippered foot slammed into my ribs. Curling up, I struggled to breathe.

My cousin kicked me again. "I told you he was listening. Even now he's a dangerous, lying sneak. Sell him!"

"Fine."

My heart should've stopped, my fear was so great, but the traitorous organ kept beating. My uncle ordered me locked in my cell. The next morning I was dragged out by my hair, my body so sore I could barely move. A sharp pain dug into my side with every breath.

In the front courtyard I was dropped into the dirt. I eyed the open gate.

"We will not risk you running from the wemic."

I couldn't hold back my screams as hot metal touched the heels of my feet.

"Cover them." My feet were wrapped in rags.

Moments later, a misshapen shadow fell over me.

"I received your message. Is this him?"

"Yes. Fifty akels and he's all yours."

Tawny paws appeared as the wemic circled me. I shook in terror.

"He doesn't look worth the price of a dinner. What can you do, boy?"

I knew the answer to that question. "Whatever you need, sir."

"Look at me."

I slowly lifted my eyes. Honey gold fur covered his body and four legs, but the tip of his tail was dark. His bare chest was covered in a leather vest, twin swords hilts above his shoulders. Worst of all were his fearsome yellow eyes and sharp teeth I could see when he snarled.  

The painful burns didn't stop me. Faster than anyone expected, I jumped to my feet and ran out the open gate.

I huddled in an alley, unable to run anymore. Bile burned my throat as I gasped for air. I rearranged the dirty rags, trying to cushion the bleeding blisters. Sweat dripped into my eyes and I wiped it away along with my tears.

I could not afford to be weak.

I would not be dinner.

TBC

Don't forget to check out the other briefers!

Cia Nordwell     m/m
Nephylim         m/m
Victoria Adams   m/f   flash virgin!!!!!
Elizabeth Morgan m/f    flash virgin!!!!!
Tali             m/m
Julie Lynn Hayes m/m

Monday, November 5, 2012

Pitched!

So I pitched a mm contemporary novella to DSP today. *Cross fingers* Wish me luck!! One more project completed, woo hoo!!

Saturday, November 3, 2012

11-3 Visiting LM Brown!

Hey readers! Just a heads up; L.M. Brown has let me take over her blog today. If you'd like to learn a little bit more about me, check out my interview.

Check it out!!

Friday, November 2, 2012

Feature & Follow 5



Q: What is a deal breaker for you in a book? For example, do you abhor love triangles? Or can’t deal with bad editing?

A: Lack of basic research. Especially when it pertains to specific locations a story is set in. If you are going to use a real city as a plot setting, have the respect to your readers to actually do some research on it. I once read a book where an Oregon city was placed in Washington instead and don't even get me started on 50 Shades where Portland is apparently in Washington between Vancouver and Seattle. *rolls eyes* Look at a damn map! At the VERY least!!


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Thursday, November 1, 2012

Cia's Reviews 2




Time for a few reviews of the books, ebooks, and online stories I've read this week! Grab a cup of your favorite warm beverage, coffee, tea, cocoa, on this cool fall day and enjoy!!


Crying For The MoonCrying For The Moon by Sarah Madison
My rating: 4 of 5 stars
MM Paranormal

I won a print copy of this book, which I received a few days ago. Finally having some quiet time, I sat down to read it. It took me about 2 hours start to finish, but I slowed down a little to enjoy certain... parts. LOL

The writing was quite well done, with only a few errors, and the flow was perfect. Sarah has wonderful writing skills that draw you into the story, even if the story is about a house betraying its new owner with all it's crumbling quirks, at first. The characters all had interesting side stories, which were introduced here and there to explain their personalities and quirks quite well. I find that to be a hard thing to do in a story that holds so many peripheral characters that are vital to the story.

My thoughts on the villian's dastardly plot were that it was a bit thin. The main character, Alex, is not dim-witted by any means, but he couldn't see what Victor was trying to do? I saw that when the first mention of him and his reaction to Alex's relocation was brought up. So, that aspect of the story, was a bit thin.

I didn't go into this for a mystery however, which is good because certain other elements, which I don't want to spoil, were very obvious. Who the characters all 'were' was pretty easy to figure out, including their supernatural inclinations. I still liked the mythos of the supernatural that was used, though. It wasn't insanely different but just enough to make things fun.

There are elements left that I'd love to see explained in later stories. Why Nick's people have so little money. The aftermath of Victor. Alex's plans to do with Victor's little reveal about their past. The progression of the relationship between Alex and Tate. Tate's past. There's certainly a lot left to be explored. I'd definitely buy follow up books to Crying for the Moon.

Shattered HeartShattered Heart by Nikki McCoy
My rating: 4 of 5 stars
MM Dystopian M/s *Content Advisory*

Shattered Heart was a very dark story, but one I still enjoyed. I really liked Corin's character, for the most part. I felt that his revelation, and reversal of his feelings about Markus, was a bit understated when Markus had his little revelation though. The emotions the book brought out seesawed in me. Sometimes I was okay with their relationship progression and others I simply couldn't 'believe' it. That lack of ability to tuck their happiness together into a neat package had nothing to do with the Master/slave dynamic, which I have enjoyed before, but more that it just didn't feel like it was the proper fit between them, even at the end. Then again, I might not be making at sense at all; the feeling I was left with created such a vague dissatisfaction that it's hard to pinpoint any one element and say, "This, this is what is bugging me." Usually I can.

The writing itself flowed quite well, and I didn't notice many errors. The plot was pretty predictable, as were the characters, but I still stayed up super late to read the story simply because I wanted to know for certain what would happen. I had to. That eclipsed my slight issues and made this a 4 star story for me. I appreciate the author's ability to write such a controversial genre, and do it pretty darn well.


Online Free Fiction

Late Night Rodeo by Branflakes length:2908 words
Synopsis: Kevin finds himself driving a drunken girl home. Why is she so far from home?

My review: Thanks Branflakes, now I'm gonna have nightmares! You add in some interesting bits to consider. Like, was she always nuts? Or was it a 'gay' thing, after her comments about how Texans don't like gay people? How'd she know the cop? Was it the guy she was arguing with and they just didn't notice?

Foolish games by kolgrim length: 330k
My rating: 3 of 5 stars

My review: Long. Complicated. Very angsty and the drama was a bit extreme, but I still read this start to finish over 2 days. I liked it, just felt that a lot of the scenes could have been pared down to make this a more readable story, with a tight plot.

Okay, I hope if you pick any of these stories to read you enjoy them as much as I did. More reviews will be coming soon!!